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Message de lilkad posté le 02-05-2010 à 11:24:40 (S | E | F)
bonjour(s)
mon professeur d'anglais nous a donné une rédaction à faire dans laquelle on doit exposer les cotés positifs et négatifs des nouvelles inventions scientifiques.pourriez vous s'il vous plaît m'aider à corriger mon orthographe et ma grammaire.
voici des extrait de ma rédaction:
And the other example is the cloning. It was created to avoid the disappearance of the species. The problem it is because the persons would like to clone human and that poses a problems. Because of piece of news technology there is more and more factory and thus more and more pollution which provokes itself problems of global warming.
On the over hand the modern scientific allows to create new vaccines and to advance in the searches to be able to save lives. For example we have to create medicines to slow down the evolution of the AIDS. The persons infringement of the AIDS can live longer. Search to find how to stop the evolution of the AIDS always progresses thanks to piece of news technology. Transport allow a permanent convenience between countries, in 24 hours we can be in the other end of the world. Transport allow to improved the exchanges of goods betweens countries. Indeed nowadays rare are people who can cross it of means of transportation as the plane train buses or the other transport!
The means of transport also serve transported thing important as medicines and the other one however these new technologies are very polluting and are has the origin of the greenhouse effect which provokes the reheating of our planet...
merci de bien vouloir m'aider
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Modifié par bridg le 02-05-2010 11:28
Message de lilkad posté le 02-05-2010 à 11:24:40 (S | E | F)
bonjour
mon professeur d'anglais nous a donné une rédaction à faire dans laquelle on doit exposer les cotés positifs et négatifs des nouvelles inventions scientifiques.pourriez vous s'il vous plaît m'aider à corriger mon orthographe et ma grammaire.
voici des extrait de ma rédaction:
And the other example is the cloning. It was created to avoid the disappearance of the species. The problem it is because the persons would like to clone human and that poses a problems. Because of piece of news technology there is more and more factory and thus more and more pollution which provokes itself problems of global warming.
On the over hand the modern scientific allows to create new vaccines and to advance in the searches to be able to save lives. For example we have to create medicines to slow down the evolution of the AIDS. The persons infringement of the AIDS can live longer. Search to find how to stop the evolution of the AIDS always progresses thanks to piece of news technology. Transport allow a permanent convenience between countries, in 24 hours we can be in the other end of the world. Transport allow to improved the exchanges of goods betweens countries. Indeed nowadays rare are people who can cross it of means of transportation as the plane train buses or the other transport!
The means of transport also serve transported thing important as medicines and the other one however these new technologies are very polluting and are has the origin of the greenhouse effect which provokes the reheating of our planet...
merci de bien vouloir m'aider
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Modifié par bridg le 02-05-2010 11:28
Réponse: Correction/nouvelles inventions de laure95, postée le 02-05-2010 à 15:14:50 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici ce que tu dois corriger:
And the other example is
On the over hand
The means of transport also serve transported thing important (pas à la bonne place) as medicines and the other one however these new technologies are very polluting and are has the origin of the greenhouse effect which provokes the reheating of our planet...
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